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October 16, 2007
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What in the world is going on here,
He said she said it's there,
So belated the talk,
It's so full of what they're afraid of


So he wants what everyone says doens't exist,
And she wants what's right in front of her,
But a misguided qoute,
Ended what chance there was


Is she talking behind your back?
Maybe you should turn around and see,
Because if you're lying,
Boy, there's gonna be reprecusions
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Hmm I think you have a typo on line 5 and 7 ^^; . Overall I really like this poem =) though for some reason I'm not too found of the last line. I think it's the word reprecusions. It just seems like a mouthfull and interupts the flow. Also for some reason when reading this I wanted to read the first and second line like this "What in the world is going on here? He said she said (that) it's there." I don't know, you're call there.

Anyways I'm faving it :aww: keep up the good work.
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haha Yeah, that's atypo nn;;

Hm, yeah, I think you're right about that last line. I'll change it when I use this for something.
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